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My case is nothing new

Post by Critical Acclaim on Wed Jan 23, 2008 7:45 am

Title: Untitled, Unknown, Unliving
Author: Jat
Chapters: Standalone
Rating: All ages, DUH!
Dedications: Councillor,,, he says write so I write
Summary:
uhh,,, fear.




Sweating, panting, broken with fear. Arms wrapped together, sitting, staring somewhere.

Eyes roam the room, over you, your case is somethign new. A rat, a squirrel, a Callum in a cage.

Shaking with fear, I sit here, not listening, not wanting to hear.
The voice, it sounds, shooting out commands, to people, watching me on the ground.
They look so near. I'm scared, nervous, I'm wishing I wasn't here.
Everybody's watching me, I'm not a rabbit or a hare.


Panting for breathe, my hand clutches out at my chest, the oxygen, air, release not reaching my lungs in the least.
They caught me, caught me in the worst. Asleep.
Where as I could not fight, in fear, I just might, only might escape and ruin their fate.

They caught me. They broke me. They fought me. The know me.
I'm nothing new to them.
I'm worn and torn, broken, pulled apart, a ware and tear, an old mess.

Sweating, panting, broken with fear, Arms wrapped together, sitting, staring somewhere.
Eyes roam the room, over me, over you, over them.
My case is nothing new. A rat, a squirrel, a Callum in a cage, taking its' last breath, only a second of life left












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Re: My case is nothing new

Post by xcutexangelx on Wed Jan 23, 2008 9:00 am

Nice writing..

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Post by Critical Acclaim on Wed Jan 23, 2008 9:02 am

No

I don't like it..
I need to edit it..
there's something not quite right.

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Post by xcutexangelx on Wed Jan 23, 2008 9:07 am

Falling and Failing wrote:No

I don't like it..
I need to edit it..
there's something not quite right.

Do what feels best..

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Music blarin' and the ladies are lookin' nice.
I'm lookin' good and you know it too.
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